DOL 25

Sentence 1: the titanic carried more then 1,500 people to there graves it was believed to by unsinkable

Sentence 2: the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land

Corrected:
1. The Titanic carried more than 1,500 people to their graves it was believed unsinkable.
2.The student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finished reading Eliots' long poem, The Waste Land.
DOL 26

Sentence 1: a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly

Sentence 2: i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library

Corrected:
1 Many well known writers submit articles and stories to the Atlantic, a renowned magazine.
2. "I am very eager to read the French novel, the Plague," Carmen said, but it's not in our library.


DOL 27

Sentence 1: everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations

Sentence 2: having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner
Corrected:
1. Everyone in this grade is responsible for this year dance; therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations.
2. Having worked for 8 hours, I need to sit down, listen to music and enjoy a good dinner.
DOL 28

Sentence 1: i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet

Sentence 2: ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing

Corrected:
1. I remember when my neighbor sets up a huge teleschope,I had ever seen to observe Haaleys Comet.
2. Ms. Masayo asked, " do you feel all right now, Walter or do you want to go skiing?"

DOL 29

Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library

Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified

DOL 33

Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library

Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified

Corrected:
1. When are thees book due Hans, should I bring them to the library?
2. After the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states, almost 3years passed before it was ratified.

DOL 34

Sentence 1: much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain

Sentence 2: while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier
Corrected:
1. Much depends on whether you're affected by the high altitude when you climb the mountain.
2.While half of the class uses the Internet, the rest will study the Smithsonian magazines that are different than the ones we used earlier.

DOL 35

Sentence 1: oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft

Sentence 2: since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming

Corrected:
1. Oh, we haven't finished with our group book report, becasue everyone doesn't have a copy of Marie's.
2. My Mom likes canoeing on the Yellowstone river hiking in Montana and camping in Wyoming.

DOL 36

Sentence 1: there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated
Sentence 2: the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think

Corrected:
1.There are some athletes, who rarely play but continued to practice Mrs. Ahmed the new principal stated.
2. The World Series although often exciting, sometimes is slow paced for me and my mom.

DOL 37

ms paula jeffers
campton paper company
18376 river drive
minneaplois mn
dear ms jeffers

Corrected:

Ms.Paula Jeffers
Campton Paper Company
18376 River Drive
Minneaplois, MN
Dear, Ms.Jeffers


DOL 38

Sentence 1: because the united states constitution sits out certain individual writes that we is all privileged to enjoy

Sentence 2: we havent neither the time or the ability to practice the play the reason being we lost so many actors to the flew
Corrected:
1. Because the United States constitution sits out certain individual rights that we are all privileged to enjoy.
2. We haven't neither the time nor the ability to practice the play because

DOL 39

Sentence 1: to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner

Sentence 2: mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29
Corrected:
1. Being allowed to go to the party, I had to finish my science project, clean my room and help my mom fix dinner.
2. Mr. Corazzini who can't start his car, was taken by bus to Dulles Airport on Tuesday, Oct.29..

DOL 40

Sentence 1: luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico

Sentence 2: oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry
Corrected:
1. Luisa bought an antique pitcher for her cousin, whi is in Atlanta, which came from Mexico.
2. Oscar, please sit these books on the library table if you don't have a lot of things to carry.

DOL 41

Sentence 1: park rangers who words in large forests periodically set fire to marked lands to encourage new growth

Sentence 2: after the discovery of penicillin very many miracle drugs appeared ironically though 40 years later bacteria are becoming very much more resistant to drugs
Corrected:
1. Park rangers, whose words in large forests periodically set fire to marked lands to encourage new growth.
2. After the discovery of Penicillin, a lot of miracle drugs appeared ironically though forty years later bacteria are becoming very much more resistant to drugs.


DOL 42 (G still needs)

Sentence 1: because of differences between the 8 camp counselors causing a change in the field trips destination

Sentence 2: first felicia planned the party secondly deciding on decorations theird she invited special guests

Corrected:
1. Differences between the eight camp counselors cuased a change in the field trip's destination.
2. First, Felicia planned the party; second,she decided on decorations; third, she incited special guests.

DOL 43

Sentence 1: do juan and davids ownership of this Sailboat entitle them two to membership in the winthrop beach yacht club

Sentence 2: the article in search of spanish galleons in the book shipwrecks was writed by kiber and rotondi who believes it will be found

Corrected:
1. Do Juan and David's ownership of this sailboat entitle them to membership in the Winthrop Beach Yacht Club.
2. The article in search of Spanich Galleons in the book shipwrecks was written by Kiber and Rotondi, who believed it will be found.